Permission?
When you asked Rama for this song, he clearly stated that you weren't allowed to use it as it was for commercial use (for money) only. Meaning that you would have to buy the beat before you were allowed to use it.
Did you end up buying this beat?
Now, as for your rapping. Yes, this track has a wicked beat, thanks to Rama. Your timing is fairly spot on, and your flow is pretty clean.
However, this track is weak. If I was in this competition, I'd laugh if I was up against you to be honest. You really need to work on how hard your punches are. Listening to this made me feel like I was being insulted by a 14 year old, with insults no stronger than;
"Your boring and you suck
And you're not slightly entertaining"
and; "stay outta my way or forever get dissed".
Seriously, as a rapper, what do I care if I forever get dissed? Bring out those hard punches, make these guys scared of their future battles against you.
Yes, the lyrics were quite clever. But they just didn't have that much needed "hype" in a "hype track". I understand you were sick, and I honestly can't wait to see what you bring to the scene.
As for mixing, a little more low end in your voice please.
And my last bit of constructive criticism is; please for the love of Hip-Hop, don't do that gay voice again, especially in your outro of this song.
Overall, nice track, nice spit. Tweak what I've told you to, and you'll go far in this competition.
Keep it up BCT, nice to see you on the scene.
~ii_